For your final blog post, consider each of the four drafts in your portfolio. What revisions and edits do you plan to do to complete your final portfolio?
Blog Prompt #8 (April 22 @ 11:59pm)
English 250–Rhetorical Grammar
For your final blog post, consider each of the four drafts in your portfolio. What revisions and edits do you plan to do to complete your final portfolio?
In “My Kind of Town: Charleston, South Carolina,” my dominant impression is that the author focuses on the history and past of Charleston as its main characteristic. She opens her piece with her sitting at her window “witnessing” a Civil War battle outside instead of seeing what is presently happening. The author showcases the historical lens through which she views her hometown; she focuses on the past more than the present, which is illustrated when she pretends not to see how Read Brothers has changed since she was a little girl. She would rather remember it as it was. Humphreys conveys her relationship to Charleston through her admiration of its history, whether general or personal; she furthermore connects her personal history to its general history, which is portrayed at the end when she sees a photograph of a girl in a calender whose identity she claims as her own.
My dominant impression of “Where Silence is Sacred” is the sacredness of silence. Iyer achieves this by contrasting the noise he is used to in the opening paragraph. To Iyer, silence is the most important aspect of a chapel, much more than the religious services. Once the author enters the chapel, it is as if time pauses and all the noisy clutter of the city fades away. The author conveys his relationship with chapels by describing the serenity he has felt in them, personal anecdotes such as when he left his job to join a Japanese monastery, and also by quoting outside sources such as Emerson and BBC on the value of silence and how his appreciation for it has been shaped.
In E.B. White’s “Once More to the Lake,” my dominant impression is the importance of carrying on family traditions and nostalgia in general. White begins the piece by reflecting on the nostalgic joy of going camping as a child with his father and siblings. The next paragraph shifts to the present as White muses how much the area has changed since he was a kid. White conveys his relationship with the place by describing how the place is the same as how he knew it as a child and how it is different (the loudness of the outboard motors, which symbolize the modernity of the current trip). However, White nevertheless links the sound to the sound of the motorboats he remembers. He links everything to his boyhood experience, even he and his son; he sees himself as his son and himself as his father.
^sorry I’m an idiot and posted on the wrong website
I plan to first look at the notes made on the papers to figure out directly what the grammatical issues are, then proofread it to see what can be adjusted further. Pertaining to the final paper, I’m going to focus mostly explaining how and why puns work in Spongebob Squarepants while also considering the audience and purpose. My plan is to use the book to inform my understanding of the way the puns work. (Transitive vs. intransitive forms of verbs from where the pun hinges.)
I plan to make revisions for my research analysis. I realized that I needed to explain how the characters talk, not just what they say. I also want to explain why their sentences are the way that they are. I realized that I used the incorrect MLA format, so I will also work on that. I need to move my thesis statement to the end of the introduction.
I plan to revise the research analysis to fix all of the comments on it. With most of the comments, I need to add more detail and explain what I mean more. I also need to fix a few other miscellaneous errors. Other than that I don’t plan to revise the other papers because I have other things to do and they seem good enough as is.
Since clarity and purpose seem to be my main problems within all of my papers. I plan on going through each draft and seeing where I can add more detail and explanation in each. Other than that, I don’t plan on making any other major changes because I don’t want to cause confusion and stress. I understand that it won’t be perfect but, I’ll try my best to make it better.
My revision plans are to look at the comments that were left on my paper and try to fix them to the best of my knowledge. I will also have my research paper looked over and I will seek out some help from Professor Fornes on the second analysis and try to get on track and headed in the right direction. I feel pretty confident about the first analysis. I have had that revised several times by other students who are better at writing than me.