Blog Prompt #3 (Part #1: 2/6/2017)

Blog Prompt #3 will be completed in two parts. Complete step #1 before class on February 1 and complete step #2 before class on February 6.

Step #1

Choose one long paragraph or two shorter paragraphs you have written. (I suggest that you choose the paragraphs from the draft with which you are working for the second analysis assignment.) Identify all complex, compound, and compound-complex sentences and “pull apart” all clauses. From those clauses, create simple sentences by removing all associated punctuation and conjunctions. (Add periods, of course.) Finish up by removing all conjunctive adverbs.

Step #2

Review the posted paragraphs and choose one. Put Humpty Dumpty back together again. That is, using your best judgment, choose the simple sentences that you believe should be combined and combine them using subordination and coordination to create compound, complex and compound-complex sentences. If you would like to do so, feel free to create gerund and infinitive phrases as adverbials. Finish up by adding conjunctive adverbs as you deem appropriate.

Post the revised paragraph(s) as a reply to the comment before class on February 6. All posts should have at least one reply.

Step #1 Example

Kept But Not Posted

After I reviewed the first analysis, it was no surprise that I tend to use a high number of compound sentences. In fact, the number of compound sentences was nearly triple the number of simple sentences. Prior to this particular assignment, I already knew about my long-sentence style of writing because I try to put every fact, idea, or piece of information about something into the same sentence. This is so the reader can gain every bit of information about the subject before I move on with my writing. It would be very difficult for me to combine any of my short sentences because they are so few and far between and most of them came before and after compound sentences that were already much longer than the average sentence length.

Posted

I reviewed the first analysis. It was no surprise that I tend to use a high number of compound sentences. The number of compound sentences was nearly triple the number of simple sentences. Prior to this particular assignment, I already knew about my long-sentence style of writing. I try to put every fact, idea, or piece of information about something into the same sentence. This is so the reader can gain every bit of information about the subject. I then move on with my writing. It would be very difficult for me to combine any of my short sentences. They are so few and far between. Most of them came before and after compound sentences that were already much longer than the average sentence length.

The Coordinating Conjunctions

for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so

Some Subordinating Conjunctions

after, although, as, because, before, even if, even though, if, once, since, unless, until, when, whenever, where, while

Some Conjunctive Adverbs

accordingly, furthermore, moreover, similarly, also, hence, namely, still, anyway, however, nevertheless, then, besides, incidentally, next, thereafter, certainly, indeed, nonetheless, therefore, consequently, instead, now, thus, finally, likewise, otherwise, undoubtedly, further, meanwhile

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13 comments for “Blog Prompt #3 (Part #1: 2/6/2017)

  1. Chasity Mitchell
    February 5, 2019 at 8:46 pm

    When the government grants free college tuition to the students, a good percentage of the students will be able to focus on their studies. Furthermore, the students will be encouraged to work hard in school. It is equivalent to say that much concentration will be on the studies rather than the school fees. In most instances, the college students who are full time usually have some part-time job which will help them pay school fees so that they can continue with their studies. This means that these students depend on their jobs so that they can be able to pay for the materials such as books and at the same time attending all class lectures they are supposed to take.
    The part-time jobs which the students have consider having will take away their time from their studies. Therefore, if the government grants free college tuition for these students, they will save much time to do studies. Furthermore, these students will have enough time to rest after day time classes instead of working in part-time jobs which consumes a lot of their time. In other words, it would show that student will not be worried about money for fees at all. In other words, these students will be preparing for their classes rather than wondering where school fees will be coming from.
    ·      – When the government grants free college tuition to the students a good percentage of the students will be able to focus on their studies.
    ·               –  The students will be encouraged to work hard in school.
    ·               –The college students who are full time have some part-time job that will help them pay school fees so that they can continue with their studies.
    ·             –  Students depend on their jobs so that they can be able to pay for the books and attend all their class lectures they are supposed to take.
    ·                 – If the government grants free college tuition for these students, they will save much time to do studies.
    ·           -These students will have enough time to rest after day time classes than working in part-time jobs which consumes a lot of their time.
    ·                     –It would show that student will not be worried about money for fees at all.
    ·              -These students will be preparing for their classes than wondering where school fees will be coming from.
    Simple Sentence- green
    Compound Sentence- blue
    Complex Sentence-yellow

  2. Shianne Huffman
    February 5, 2019 at 9:16 pm

    In the early years of time, dating into the early 200 B.C., there has been documentation of exercise throughout the different cultures. Philosophers in these times spoke about having longevity through a proper diet and regular movement. Some examples can be seen in India, Yoga was created to help combat health illnesses, maintain health, and proper breathing techniques. In Africa the people used “the systems of flexibility, agility, and endurance training in their daily life” (CDC). Other cultures, such as the Greeks, Romans, and American Indians, used exercise as a way to fight and hunt, basically survival skills. Throughout history, exercise has been used, it may have been conducted differently, there was a similar theme: maintain good health.

    • Cedia Vicks
      February 6, 2019 at 1:00 pm

      I enjoyed reading this. It is always very interesting to me to learn facts like this that goes this far back into history. From reading this, I would definitely like to read your paper and get even more knowledge about this particular topic.

    • Shianne Huffman
      February 13, 2019 at 1:56 pm

      There is documentation of exercise in all cultures dating back to 200 B.C. Proper diet and regular movement was taught by philosophers. India created Yoga to combat health illnesses, maintain health, and teach proper breathing techniques. The people of Africa used “the systems of flexibility, agility, and endurance training in their daily life” (CDC). Greeks, Romans, and American Indians used exercise as basic survival skills.

  3. Cedia Vicks
    February 5, 2019 at 11:00 pm

    It started my freshman year of high school. I met this boy named Deandre. I met Dre at a football game with my old friends. He approached me. He immediately began to flirt with me. He asked me what my name was. I don’t know what it was about him, I liked him. I liked how he was so brave. I like the fact that he didn’t send his friends to come get my attention like most boys at that age did. He took charge. It wasn’t until I got older that I realized that I didn’t know much about what I like at that age though. I was still trying to figure myself out at this age. I was naïve, I was stupid, I was a young teenage girl thinking that I knew what love was like. I honestly didn’t know the half of it . For three years I thought I knew what it felt like to be “loved”. It was a point in life that I finally stepped back into reality. I realized that what I went through wasn’t love. Love isn’t supposed to betray you. Love isn’t supposed to hurt you. Love isn’t supposed to embarrass you. I thought that love was supposed to be full of happiness. At this age, I didn’t fully understand the concept of love when it came to be being in a relationship. This is what led me to my first heartbreak that forever changed me, for the better. 

     

    • Jordan Fraser
      February 6, 2019 at 11:45 am

      I’m awfully sorry about your heartbreak.

      When reading this, I found myself pausing at the end of every sentence. If that was intentional for dramatic effect, it’s working but it might be better to have compound sentences to compare the simple sentences to. Contrast makes those sentences pop. The emotional expression is very strong in your writing, as it is with most personal writing. I appreciate you putting yourself out there.

  4. Hailey Stamper
    February 6, 2019 at 10:05 am

    Benedick seems to lie to himself as he muses about what people might say if he wants to get married, as he’s denied wanting to do so for so long. Then Benedick makes a quote about how some things must be endured in youth, as they can’t be when older. This figurative language is perhaps the most confusing line of Benedick’s monologue, but the metaphor is undoubtedly about Beatrice. Here, Benedick is paying Beatrice an offhanded compliment- not too unusual from the ways they typically interact with one another. By saying this, Benedick means that perhaps he was scared to love Beatrice for who she is, which is everything he has been looking for. Here, Benedick is saying that he thinks he could handle her now, even if he’s not sure about when he’s older. He continues this by wondering about their future while also complimenting her mind and her wit. Shakespeare uses figurative language here to make Benedick profess that he is scared of love, but in a roundabout way that won’t mar his public appearances.
    Benedick lies to himself. He does so when musing about what others will say on his view of marriage. Benedick says things must be endured when younger, not older. The most confusing line of Benedick’s is a metaphor about Beatrice. Not unusual from the ways they interact with each other, Benedick is paying Beatrice an offhanded compliment. Beatrice had everything Benedick was looking for. Benedick was scared to love Beatrice. Unsure about at an older age, Benedick says he could handle her now. Benedick compliments her mind and wit. He continues wondering about their future. Shakespeare uses figurative language to show that Benedick fears love. This is done in such a way that his public appearance won’t be marred.

    Having denied wanting to be married for so long, Benedick lies to himself when musing about what others will say about his marriage. He then makes a quote about how some things must be endured when younger, not older. This confusing line of figurative language is a metaphor about Beatrice. This behavior is not unusual from the ways they interact with each other, though Benedick is paying Beatrice an offhanded compliment. Beatrice possessed the traits Benedick was looking for, which is why he was scared to love her. Unsure about when he’s older, Benedick says he could handle her at the present time. He continues wondering about their future, as he compliments her mind and wit. Here Shakespeare is using figurative language to show that Benedick fears love. However, this is done in such a way that his public appearance won’t be marred.

  5. Jordan Fraser
    February 6, 2019 at 11:39 am

    Anilise opened her eyes at the sound of a new day. The sun had not yet risen but the deep indigo of the night before was stained with orange at its hem on the horizon. The roosters announced the coming dawn with a chorus of crowing. Only Anilise stirred from her resting place. She used the cobblestone walls to support herself and clumsily pulled herself to a stand which woke the other women who shared a sleeping place on the floor. Sierra, Marjorie, Katherine, and the “Old Bird” began to roll over and sit up.
    Anilise had wasted very little time folding her quilt and tucking it neatly in the corner. The small room that the five girls shared spared no room for more than a small dresser in the corner. Each of the younger girls had half a drawer but the Old Bird had the top drawer all to herself. The little three-drawer dresser provided just enough room for the girls’ aprons and rags.
    The girls had all slept in their clothes from the previous day to help make dressing the next day easier. It still took them a long time to prepare for the day’s chores.
     
    The room had one big window with ratty, dusty-blue curtains that had not been replaced since the Old Bird was bought. There were no mirrors in the small room. They relied on each other to fix appearances.

  6. Aostin Priester
    February 11, 2019 at 11:18 am

     
    In conclusion, the Indonesian instruments are all unique in their appearance and has many facts about them. All of them look ancient, foreign and have a golden/brownish color to them. The bonangs look like small golden pots. The kenongs look like taller bonangs and they also look like jars or urns. Like the bonangs, they also have the golden color to their appearance. The saron looks like an ancient xylophone. The gender is apart of the metallophone family. It also has the ancient appearance. The kendhang is basically an Indonesian drum. It is also golden/brown in color and it has a unique ancient appearance. The kempul is the largest of the Indonesian instruments. It looks like it has a bunch of bonangs hanging from it. It has unique dragon statues on top of it. I really appreciate these instruments because most of them actually look cooler than some American instruments. I think out of everything I have learned this semester, I enjoyed learning about these instruments the most. I have never seen any of these instruments before. Some day, I would love an opportunity to play some of these instruments or see them in person at least.
    *Complex Sentences – Bolded
    *Compound Sentences – Italicized
    *Simple Sentences – Underlined

  7. Alex Deal
    February 11, 2019 at 11:59 am

    Dumpster Depot
    would have a contract with the city of Aiken to allow them to commercially compost.
    (17) There is no cost savings in composting. (7) It will cost money to have bins in the city. There will be dumpsters
    for compost in areas such as the Haven or Churchill Commons.
    (24) It cost
    nothing for the city to recycle. (8) It all goes to Dumpster Depot to be sorted
    out. (10) According to the EPA they will not open new landfills so they will
    have to travel further to haul off trash. (21) The Three River landfill in
    Aiken they do not compost. (10) The yard
    debris and food waste is being weighted. Dumped there with the other household
    trash.
    (17) We could easily reduce the amount of waste we put into the
    landfill. (13) In the long run there
    will be money saved.  The weight will be
    reduced therefore the amount to unload will decrease.
    (22)  The solution is composting. (4) Dumpster Depot
    has a program that is called Greenworks in order to promote composting. (14)
    They offer lectures such as composting 101 and composting 102. (10) These
    events are actually held at the Convocation Center in the VIP room. (13) According
    to Mr. Dunagan there first time they had “460 out of 200 started composting and
    are still active”(Dunagan). (18) The city of Aiken needs to start taking action
    now. (10) There is a bulletin board at University of South Carolina Aiken in
    the Humanities and Social Science building it reads “The future is now”. (24) If
    the future is now then city of Aiken needs to act on it now or it can start at
    Usca. (21) 18
    The sentences in bold were the ones I changed and made into simple sentences. This paragraph it made up of 10 simple sentences and 7 compound. Most commonly used coordinating conjunction was “and” and I used “so”once. The only subordinating conjunction is used was “because”.

  8. Shayn Price
    February 11, 2019 at 7:41 pm

    June 6, 1944, is known for the Allied invasion of Normandy during World War II.  On this day in history, Allied troops of roughly 160,000 forces from the United States, Great Britain, and Canada landed on five Normandy beaches to surprise the Nazis in France. Gen. Dwight D. Eisenhower commanded this attack. This event was significant to the downfall of the Nazis during the war. “This operation is planned as a victory. That’s the way it’s going to be. We’re going down there. We’re throwing everything we have into it. We’re going to make it a success” (Military.com). But on this same day in Tampa, Florida, a boy was born. He grew up to share that same positive attitude.  Mr. John Strickland is no war hero. He passionately helps others because of his own scouting background and displays this passion through his willingness to mentor Boy Scouts in our local area as well as his continued efforts to volunteer and support scouting on the district and council levels in the CSRA.

    • Shayn Price
      February 13, 2019 at 9:42 pm

      June 6, 1944, otherwise known as D-Day, is known for the Allied invasion of Normandy during World War II.  On this day in history, Allied troops of roughly 160,000 forces from the United States, Great Britain, and Canada landed on five Normandy beaches to surprise the Nazis in France. Gen. Dwight D. Eisenhower commanded this attack, and this event was significant to the downfall of the Nazis during the war.  Eisenhower stated, “This operation is planned as a victory, and that’s the way it’s going to be. We’re going down there, and we’re throwing everything we have into it, and we’re going to make it a success” (Military.com). But on this same day in Tampa, Florida, a boy was born who grew up to share that same positive attitude.  Mr. John Strickland is no war hero, but he passionately helps others because of his own scouting background and displays this passion through his willingness to mentor Boy Scouts in our local area as well as his continued efforts to volunteer and support scouting on the district and council levels in the CSRA.

  9. Jordan Fraser
    February 13, 2019 at 11:00 am

    Anilise opened her eyes at the sound of a new day. The sun had not yet risen but the deep indigo of the night before was stained with orange at its hem on the horizon. The roosters announced the coming dawn with a chorus of crowing. Only Anilise stirred from her resting place. She used the cobblestone walls to support herself and clumsily pulled herself to a stand which woke the other women who shared a sleeping place on the floor. Sierra, Marjorie, Katherine, and the “Old Bird” began to roll over and sit up.Anilise had wasted very little time folding her quilt and tucking it neatly in the corner. The small room that the five girls shared spared no room for more than a small dresser in the corner. Each of the younger girls had half a drawer but the Old Bird had the top drawer all to herself. The little three-drawer dresser provided just enough room for the girls’ aprons and rags.The girls had all slept in their clothes from the previous day to help make dressing the next day easier. It still took them a long time to prepare for the day’s chores. The room had one big window with ratty, dusty-blue curtains that had not been replaced since the Old Bird was bought. There were no mirrors in the small room. They relied on each other to fix appearances.

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